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alias_sqbr ([personal profile] alias_sqbr) wrote2025-06-01 06:09 pm

Steering the Craft: Chapter 1, the sound of your writing

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A while ago I bought a copy of Steering the Craft by Ursula K Le Guin, "A revised and updated guide to the essentials of a writer’s craft" since people keep reccing it. I read through to the first exercise and then Got Stuck. But I am going to have another go now I've thought some more about what kinds of writing I actually like doing (eg fanfic), and try and keep notes as I go.

She starts by talking about the importance of the sound of language *spends a bunch of time figuring out how to remove the DRM from my Kobo book so I can copy quotes*

A good writer, like a good reader, has a mind’s ear. We mostly read prose in silence, but many readers have a keen inner ear that hears it. Dull, choppy, droning, jerky, feeble: these common criticisms of narrative are all faults in the sound of it. Lively, well-paced, flowing, strong, beautiful: these are all qualities of the sound of prose, and we rejoice in them as we read. Narrative writers need to train their mind’s ear to listen to their own prose, to hear as they write.


Oh no she wants me to READ SOME EXAMPLES OF TEXT ALOUD. I didn't do this last time I read this section but I'll do it now, softly (she says to be loud but Cam is home and I'd feel silly)

  • Rudyard Kipling: from “How the Rhinoceros Got His Skin” in Just So Stories: Fairytale logic
  • Mark Twain: from “The Celebrated Jumping Frog of Calaveras County”: Telling a wild tale in a strong dialect
  • Zora Neale Hurston: from Their Eyes Were Watching God "To read Hurston’s sentences aloud is to be caught up in their music and beat, their hypnotic, fatal, forward drive. In this one and the next, the vocabulary is simple and familiar; it’s above all the rhythm that is powerful and effective."
  • Molly Gloss: from The Hearts of Horses


OK AND NOW WHERE I GOT STUCK.

EXERCISE ONE: Being Gorgeous
Part One: Write a paragraph to a page of narrative that’s meant to be read aloud. Use onomatopoeia, alliteration, repetition, rhythmic effects, made-up words or names, dialect—any kind of sound effect you like—but NOT rhyme or meter.


So, trying to write something NEW and ORIGINAL made my brain screech to a halt last time. So lets try the sort of thing I actually write, eg fanfic. Jack Jeanne seems like a logical fit since not only am I into it right now but it's all about dancing and music and poetry.

Soshiro snuck into the silent space of the studio at night, the door closing behind him with a quiet snickt. His feet beat out a careful rhythm as he slowly spun into a solitary dance, a susurrus of dancing shoes sliding against smooth lacquer as his body bent and whirled to the music in his mind. He danced until it hurt, until his breath came out as a harsh wheeze from his straining chest, until the light through the shuttered windows slowly shifted from peach to blue to black. But it wasn't enough. It would never be enough. He was falling behind, losing his place, losing her, and no amount of dancing in dark was going to change that.

OK. DONE. DEPRESSING LITTLE CHARACTER PIECE: GET. Reading it out loud to myself as I went did improve it a bit, I think. I am having SO much self consciousness at the thought that it might be baaaad writing oh nooooo but it is an EXERCISE. The only way you fail an exercise is by NOT DOING IT. MOVING ON.

She had some extra advice on how to approach it that I only read afterwards, oops. DON'T CARE, IT'S DONE.

Part Two: In a paragraph or so, describe an action, or a person feeling strong emotion—joy, fear, grief. Try to make the rhythm and movement of the sentences embody or represent the physical reality you’re writing about.

*cough* I mean. Technically. Didn't I already do that? >.> But ok fine let's do another one, in a different mood. Hmm, lets go for Auni from Palia.

Oh my gosh! Let me tell you something! I was exploring up by the old temple near our house, cos it's so weird and interesting. And I saw the coolest thing! I knew I couldn't stay out too late or Mom would get mad, so I was kind of in a hurry. So I nearly missed it. But then I saw something glowing out of the corner of my eye and I turned around I saw it. The biggest fire-breathing dragonfly you ever saw! It was the size of my head! Ok maybe not that big. But really huge! And it was spitting fire all over the place! Foosh! Blahhhh!! Like I know they're called fire breathing dragon flies but they don't actually breathe much fire. Most of the time, anyway! But this one was super fire-y. It was amazing!

Not sure that's what she meant but I tried!

Did concentrating on the sound of the writing release or enable anything unusual or surprising, a voice you haven’t often used?

Ehh not really. That's actually something I think about already, so it just got me to put more effort into it, but it wasn't a fundamental change in how I write. I was really into writing silly poetry as a kid, the sort with lots of onomatopoeia etc, and some of the techniques stuck around. Reading it out loud did get me to tweak some of the wording a little.

Did you enjoy being gorgeous, or was it a strain? Can you say why?

Making the extra effort made me feel self conscious. Normally no one explicitly knows when I'm trying to make my prose sound pretty, so it only gets mentioned if I succeed. But now someone might read this post and go "wow, that was Sean TRYING to make their prose sound good? Ouch D:". Even if that person is me!

How do you respond to the work of a novelist or essayist who visibly strives to write striking or poetical prose, using unusual or archaic words, combining words in a surprising way, going in for sound effects?

Hmm. I like it sometimes, but not if I feel like it's getting in the way of actually telling the story. It's a secondary concern for me, not the main meal. But I have definitely noticed and appreciated it when it does work for me, and clunky awkward prose does undermine my enjoyment a bit.

It can be fun to think about names in fiction and what it is about the sound of them that makes them meaningful.


Yeah!

Being Gorgeous is a highly repeatable exercise, by the way, and can serve as a warm-up to writing... It might get you into the swing.


Lol nope. It was an interesting challenge but absolutely did not make me feel like writing MORE, except maybe in the sense of "wow writing without thinking about it so hard sure is a lot less excruciating".

BUT I DID IT. CHAPTER ONE DOWN. GO ME.
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[personal profile] winterbird 2025-06-02 04:09 am (UTC)(link)
I remember doing so many prompts like this at university for creative writing, and it really is just 400 versions of things like this for character, setting, description, emotion, texture etc. They're useful!! And it's not bad writing, it's the equivalent of sketching/doodling, but writing. (I wish we had a better word for it, because it's not 'drafting' either).

Tbh I think learning more about yourself like this is really awesome, but remember you don't have to stick to the book if it's not the vibe!! (Though finding out which prompts you like and which ones you don't can also be fun).

It's funny thinking about your reflection on this, and how in the past year in particular I've realised I'm not a novelist like I thought I was (6 million of my words are not novels, they're serials) and how...pigeonholing myself made me pretty miserable. I'm all for pushing at the boundaries of what writing is expected to be.

Re: Your last post, you do not have to like short stories! I don't like them, and I've written them and won awards for them. They're not a stepping stone into novels, and so many are SAD. They feel empty. Tbh the way you describe multi-path exploration in larger worlds, it feels like short stories would be one of the most painful manifestations of writing for you, and so dissatisfying. Even worse than a film trailer because at least a film trailer leads to the film!

(Also reading out loud to myself really helps re: writing for me, text to speech programs can be handy, something about the way the words feel in the mouth is just cool, but can hurt your throat! (Also the snickt is such a cool sound)).
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[personal profile] winterbird 2025-06-02 11:08 am (UTC)(link)
Ohhhh yeah I can see how that would be an easy pigeonhole to find yourself in, since the stuff you write superficially looks like novels in a way my games, say, don't, but it's still doing something legitimately different and trying to judge your work by novel standards will make perfectly good serials look like "incorrect" novels.

I felt SO isolated in every professional novel group I've ever joined because all their writing and marketing advice just never applied to me (and it still doesn't). I've gleaned bits and pieces but in a very... /thinks/ it feels very much like being told how to paint acrylics when I specialise in pastels. Sure, some aspects will apply (i.e. some of the colour theory etc) but there's some really core parts that differ hugely.

The best source for me has always been and remains TV series, particularly dense, multi-season series with multiple storylines.

Do you feel you have something comparable like that? Where it's like, more helpful than the thing everyone assumes will be helpful, but still isn't the thing itself?

(I've also never met anyone who kind of 'inceptions' their fics like I do with so many character AUs, like I know it happens, but with original fics? For over a decade? In tons of different scenarios? I feel like I like to play with the same characters in different worlds. And from what you describe, you like to play with different plots / plot choices within the same world, and how that by necessity would also kind of alter the characters over time? So you get the experience of different flavours of that character but within the same world? (After all a character who gets a happy romantic ending is living a different life to that same character who gets heartbreak, or a complicated romantic ending within that same world!)
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[personal profile] scytale 2025-06-03 07:11 pm (UTC)(link)
I want to come back to your reflections more carefully later but for now please know that I laughed out loud at "Lol nope. It was an interesting challenge but absolutely did not make me feel like writing MORE, except maybe in the sense of "wow writing without thinking about it so hard sure is a lot less excruciating"

Mood!!

Steering the Craft exercise 1: an excellent exercise to get yourself to do literally anything else (I say this with love, but also)